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Smooth Radio

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This is an article concerning one of the UK's more popular radio stations, which launched in 2010. I've listed the article for peer review because I'd like to take it forward to GA in the next few months, and want some feedback on how it's looking so far. I have plans for sections on listening figures and some of the special features the station has hosted, including Help for Heroes Day and the annual "switch-on" of the Blackpool Illuminations. I'll also eventually put it through the copyediting process. What I'm interested in knowing is what else the article might need, and if there's anything I've missed. Thanks, Paul MacDermott (talk) 15:02, 14 September 2012 (UTC)

Yomangani's comments

• The lead fails to mention that the commitment to jazz programming has been dropped
• "GMG, under licence to The Local Radio Company relaunched Jazz FM despite the decision." - what does "under licence" mean here? Also, the phrasing implies that the relaunch was in contravention of the decision when I suspect (after re-reading it several times) that they went ahead with the relaunch despite having to continue with the jazz commitment that they wanted to drop.
• Various DAB multiplexes are mentioned - a brief explanatory note wouldn't go amiss alongside some of these. What is a DAB multiplex? Similarly for such terms as "simulcast" a link or explanation would help..
• "to air 1970s editions of the original American Top 40 show presented by Casey Kasem at weekends" - to air them or weekends or they were presented by Casey Kasem at weekends (I'd guess the first but it could be clearer)
• The second and third paragraphs of "Going National" seem a bit odd - the article to this point has been discussing the evolution of the radio station but here it morphs into a list of some of the programmes and competitions. If the intention is to show that the station is breaking away from its parochial roots with coverage national and international events and higher profile competitions, I think the evidence could be presented better.
• Current line-up: this is horribly unmaintainable (although I fear these sort of "current X" lists and sections are becoming ubiquitous nowadays). Also, what is the order here? Will the unlinked DJs never have articles (otherwise why not add a redlink for them?) Why is it that current presenters get bolding and former presenters don't.

I haven't checked the quality of the references, but after a copyedit I shouldn't think GA will be too much of a hurdle. Yomangani^talk 23:45, 27 September 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. Think I've fixed everything now. Paul MacDermott (talk) 21:10, 28 September 2012 (UTC)