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Six Moments Musicaux (Rachmaninoff)

As a relatively unknown composition of a fading genre, I'd like to get feedback on what improvements can be made to get this to the highest possible quality. ALTON .ıl 01:57, 13 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 00:21, 15 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I haven't read it all, but I think it's on a firm trajectory towards FA. Well done. Needs a quick run-through to fix a few little things in the prose, that's all. "marks a significant point analogous to Schubert's first Moments Musicaux,"—surely the pause isn't analogous to the whole of the Schubert piece, but a pause in that piece. "The legato throughout the piece is made difficult through the melody that interchanges hands in the Con moto, and ...". This is from the performer's, not the listener's point of view, I guess. Difficult legato ... Hmmm. And better "difficult to play because of the interchange of the melody from hand to hand ...". " the complex musical style contained within this hybrid require successful rehearsals and strategic techniques"—Sorry to be picky, but much good music requires these. And in any case, it's unclear what strategic techniques are. Bit vague; perhaps remove as not wise of the original source to include; or perhaps it is explained there, but in too great a detail to include here.

I do wonder about the Commons audio files: doesn't sound like a Finale output; are you sure? Pity they're so short and end with a sudden yanking out of the texture. Tony 13:37, 15 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

They are, trust me (but I did mess with them in Audacity). I thought that there might be a problem with copyright, but I think the vast majority of photoshopped works licensed as PD on commons validates my assumption that my work on Finale is PD as well, if I so wish. If you're saying they're too good, then I guess technology has progressed since they use that Personal Orchestra now. If you're saying they're horrendous, then I guess technology will never get the same level of skill that humans can get. Also, they're short because I don't really want to write out the whole score, right now the output isn't worth it. ALTON .ıl 20:26, 15 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Alton, you have a very good article here and I would suggest you take to FAC as it is. There's nothing I can see that needs immediate attention and wouldn't be able to corrected during a FAC. Centy – reply• contribs – 15:53, 15 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

From the opening sentence: "Six" isn't a very french word. Ceoil 16:00, 16 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I could be wrong, but I think that is actually the French word: 6 at French pedia. If that is so, I suppose it should be made more clear. ALTON .ıl 03:57, 17 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, 1 - 10 in French is un, deux, trois, quatre, cinq, six, sept, huit, neuf, dix. Centy – reply• contribs – 10:37, 17 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, thanks for your edits to the articles and the suggestions. It's at FAC now. ALTON .ıl 22:16, 17 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]