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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know what could be improved on. The lead and prose probably need to be looked over... But all comments/suggestions are welcome since I'm hoping to bring it back up to GA status. Thanks, Kaguya-chan (talk) 19:31, 13 June 2010 (UTC)
- Comments from Tezero:
- Intro:
- It's the Sony PlayStation 2, not just Sony PlayStation 2. Although the console had mass appeal, it's not a mass noun.
- Xbox and PC should be linked, just as the PS2 is.
- Third paragraph... "Gameplay" is one word.
- Gameplay
- The first mention of James in this section is "when James' flashlight is on." Work his name somewhere into the text before that to give some context; for example, you might change "the player character" to "James Sunderland, the player character".
- Again... "gameplay" is one word. I reference the first sentence of the second paragraph.
- Consider the following: "six weapons available: three melee weapons and three firearms, with another two unlocked during replays"... Two of what are unlocked during replays? Melee weapons? Firearms? Vacuum cleaners? (trust me, those can be deadly.) All we have to go by is "weapons", on which you should elaborate a bit.
- Characters
- Player character is already linked in the Gameplay section.
- Releases
- Again, the thing about the PS2, and the thing about the Xbox and PC.
- Reception
- In the paragraph that begins with GameSpot, the second sentence should be changed from "which GameSpot called" to "which it called"... it just seems like it says GameSpot too much. No huge deal.
- When it says "twentieth greatest PlayStation game of all time"... isn't this game for the PS2? Tezero (talk) 18:28, 17 June 2010 (UTC)
- Intro:
- Thanks for taking the time to review and catch the typos. :) I fixed the problems you found. The unlockable weapons are a chainsaw and some sort of spray, not a vacuum cleaner. This time. :) I'm still looking for a reliable source for that, however, since the current source only states that there are two unlockable weapons. Kaguya-chan (talk) 01:48, 18 June 2010 (UTC)
- If you own the game, you can use its instruction booklet. Also, if the game says something like "You unlocked a chainsaw" or "1 chainsaw found" you could cite that as a quote. Not everything needs to be third-party sources. Tezero (talk) 21:54, 21 June 2010 (UTC)
- That's good to know. :) Kaguya-chan (talk) 20:20, 22 June 2010 (UTC)
- If you own the game, you can use its instruction booklet. Also, if the game says something like "You unlocked a chainsaw" or "1 chainsaw found" you could cite that as a quote. Not everything needs to be third-party sources. Tezero (talk) 21:54, 21 June 2010 (UTC)