Wikipedia:Peer review/Shivaji/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because this article deserves a better rating than the one it currently has. The article seems to be well structured and covers the entire life of Shivaji. It no more seems to have the problem of NPOV and peacock terms. Thanks Kesangh (talk) 12:58, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
- Sources: Thjat star tv series needs episode numberor name everywhere in article. Hometech (talk) 11:47, 13 June 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, but still needs a lot of work. Here are some suggestions for improvement.
- Please see WP:LEAD which says the lead should not be more than 4 paragraphs.
- Article needs many more references - for example the whole Foundation of empire section is one of many sections that has no refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. Books need more info on publisher, date etc. {{cite web}}, {{cite book}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Some of the images appear to be of relatively modern works of art - not sure what the copyright laws are like in India, but I suspect some of these may be have questionable copyright status and definitely need more source information.
- Do you really think language like And young Shivaji Maharaj, energetic and enthusiastic as he was, wasted no time in setting off on a path of freedom and glory. is really NPOV?
- The article has many short (one or two sentence) paragraphs that impede the flow of the article and should be combined with others or perhaps expanded.
- The article has lots of lists / bullet points that should be converted to text in most cases.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:47, 23 June 2009 (UTC)