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I've listed this article for peer review because it used to be a featured article, and was removed in 2009. I've read through the article and personally, cannot see any issues. There was one citation needed tag, which I added a source for. I personally feel the article is ready to be a featured article again, but obviously I need some more opinions!
Thanks, -- Jack?! 03:04, 7 July 2010 (UTC)
Comments from Niagara
Governance
- "...gained the council from NOC..."
- Spell out "NOC"
Done
- "...during the 1980s administration under David Blunkett..."
- What position did Blunkett hold?
Done - Changed the sentence to make this clear.
Geography
- I'd recommend using {{Panorama}} for the panorama of Sheffield.
Done
- "...across the city.[34][3]"
- When more than one citation is used concurrently, make sure the are ordered from lowest to highest. ([3][34])
Done
- "and, according to Sheffield City Council, it is England's greenest city,[37] a claim that was reinforced when it won the 2005 Entente Florale competition."
- Sentence fragment, also it might be good to move this claim up near the claim of being the European city with the most "trees per person".
Done - moved up to the section suggested.
- "...off NE England..."
- Spell out NE; same goes for "SW England"
Done
- "5,798,361 tonnes"
- Link the unit,
Done also, see about providing a conversion to tons. ✗ Not done
- Link the unit,
- Not completely sure what is meant by the conversion, or how I would go about this.
- In short, the equivalent of a "tonne" in the US is a "ton"; one "tonne" is equal to ~1.102 "tons". {{Convert}} is able to handle this easily. Niagara Don't give up the ship 02:46, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
- Not completely sure what is meant by the conversion, or how I would go about this.
- Would putting the various historical populations of Sheffield into {{Historical populations}}, work better?
Done - works much better
Economy
- "60 MW"
- Link and spell out "MW"
Done
Transportation
- "...city to London via the East Midlands,"
- Is the emphasis on "via" needed?
Done - no it wasn't.
- Is their a better photo of the Sheffield railway station? Frankly, I'm not sure what, exactly, it shows.
Doing... - I will take a new picture when possible (I have just invested in a new camera). It shows the station at night, which is clear to me, but, understandably, not to others.
- If you are not able to get a better photo, there are a some interior and platform photos in the station's article that will work just as well. Niagara Don't give up the ship 02:46, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
Culture and attractions
- "...a 24hr service..."
- Spell out "24h"
Done
Twin towns and sister cities
- Is their any particular reason why the flag of Kashmir is used as the identifier for Kotli, Pakistan, when the other twin towns and sister cities use a national flag?
Done - I think this was because Kashmir has a strange political situation, but done, as it is part of Pakistan.
- Understandable, I take it that this would be the same reason Kashmir is the only the political subdivision included in the list. Niagara Don't give up the ship 02:46, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
- "Two roads in Sheffield have been named after sister cities. A section of the Sheffield Parkway in Norton is named Bochum Parkway, and a road in Hackenthorpe is named Donetsk Way."
- Use a colon between the two sentences, instead of a full-stop.
Done
Interesting and well-written article; I could see this becoming an FA. Consider reviewing an article in the backlog, which is how I found yours. Niagara Don't give up the ship 00:53, 14 July 2010 (UTC)