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I've listed this article for peer review because I thought the article is complete after i put so much effort into it. If there are still any suggestions. they are welcome.

Thanks, Sainsf <^> (talk) 07:24, 12 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead is way too short, have a look at WP:LEAD for guidance. It's intended to summarise the major topics of the article.
"Adult in the Taronga Zoo" in the infobox, usually Taronga Zoo isn't preceded with "the".
Before you use an abbreviation of IUCN, you should expand it.
"its magnificent horns[3], " magnificent is your opinion, and refs should go after punctuation, not before, wherever possible. Check the rest of the article.
Bags of over linking. To start with, we don't link individual dates or years. Next you should use sue common sense, would a reader of this article know what a "sheep" is? More than likely so there's no need to link it. You should check the rest of the article, I'll do my best to point out the clear ones.
German would be best linked to German people rather than Germany, ditto for England, but consider, is it relevant to link these in this type of article?
"the name leucoryx failed" how does a name "fail"?
Two dab links, migration and roots.
"is just over a meter" all of them? At what point in their life is that measured?
Number ranges should use the en-dash, not the hyphen.
"a meter to a meter and a quarter " -> 1.00 m to 1.25 m
Don't relink things in the same paragraph (as a minimum), e.g. horns.
The female has 4 nipples. See WP:MOSNUM, normally this would be written as "four". Check the rest of the article.
Morning, evening, tree, shrub, all unnecessarily linked. Check the rest of the article.

That gets about half-way, there's a way to go, particularly dealing with the way-excessive linking going on. Would also consider a really good copyedit from someone who knows better than I. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]