Wikipedia:Peer review/Samsara (Jainism)/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because…Samsara is one of the most important concept of Jainism and hence this article needs to be rated/improved from a broader perspective
Thanks, Anish (talk) 12:18, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
- Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
I'm very much a non-expert in this field so my comments will be from the perspective of someone who wishes to learn more and understand the concepts here. Also, I'll try to pick up any manual of style issues on the way.
- I would express a bit more about the context of Jainism in the lead, the lead needs expansion anyway.
- It could also be helped by being expressed a little more scientifically - while I'm sure it's fact to a lot of people, saying "The Saṃsāra is without any beginning and the soul finds itself in bondage with its karma since the beginingless time." is a little POV. It'd be better to say something like "It is believed that..."
- Who or what is "Uttarâdhyayana Sûtra " and what makes his or its comment so relevant?
- Remove spaces between punctuation and citations, per WP:CITE.
- Saṃsāra or Samsara or Samsâra- be consistent within the article.
- Why is Three Jewels in bold?
- In general it's less encyclopaedic and more sermon-esque. It should make more of an attempt to deal with the subject objectively.
- The references are meaningless to me.
Not positive I agree, but to a non-expert, this is very hard to get a grip on. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:58, 18 April 2008 (UTC)