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Royal Standard of Scotland

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'm at a loss as to how to proceed to improve the article yet further. I've had a look at those FAs within the category of Awards, decorations and vexillology and would welcome pointers as to how to raise this article to a similar standard.

Thanks, Endrick Shellycoat 23:04, 1 January 2010 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments: Excellent and informative summary article, subject to a few minor points as listed.

• One dablink needs fixing - use box in top left of this review page to identify
• Images need alt text; see WP:ALT
• Capitalisation: some words should be capitalised only when forming part of formal titles, but not in the general text. For example, "royal", "the" (as in "The Saltire", "The Sovereign) should not generally be capitalises ("royal emblem", "royal residences", "the Saltire", "the Sovereign" etc) Please check through the article for capital usage.
• The lead gives three names for the Royal Standard of Scotland, and uses all of them, apparently indiscriminately. Would it not be better to refer to the Standard consistently by one of its names?
• Design: Brilliant! the clearest translation of heraldic gobbledygook I've seen. But perhaps the History section should come first, so we have an idea of who was responsible for this design
• History: I've done some minor prose tweaks in second paragraph.
• Use at royal residences: "royal" should not be capitalised in section heading. The parenthetical content should be made into a grammatical sentence, and the parentheses are not necessary.
• Use by royal representaives: shouldn't this be "Use by the Sovereign's representatives"? It is she they are representing.
• Use by the Heir Apparent: It would be better for the reader if at this stage, rather than later, you identified this duke as Prince Charles.
• National Flag of Scotland: I have removed a bit of wordiness. Perhaps you could give, say, one example of the "certain exceptions" with which the section currently ends.
• Images: File:Alexander II (Alba) ii.JPG has the wrong licence - should be PD-US not PD-old (image published in the US before 1923)

Brianboulton (talk) 13:50, 9 January 2010 (UTC)

Thanks very much for your time and effort re. all of the above; very much appreciated. I'll attend to your recommendations A.S.A.P. Regards Endrick Shellycoat 18:58, 12 January 2010 (UTC)