Wikipedia:Peer review/Rocky/archive1
I've been working on this for quite a while now, 2 failed GA nominations, i am in the process of acquiring and citing some reviews but some other thoughts would be nice
(The Bread 09:42, 8 September 2006 (UTC))
- My comments:
- In "Production", I wonder if its necessary to have that same citiation after so many different sentences.
- About the original script: "...Rocky throw the fight after realizing he didn't want to be part of the world he'd entered." That could explained. What world did he enter?
- The prose could still be improved, but it might be good enough for WP:GAC. The article somehow doesn't seem complete, though. In addition to a section on critical acclaim, maybe a section influence, legacy, etc? You could also include the video games there, which would take them out of the lead where they don't really belong. -- bcasterline • talk 17:14, 8 September 2006 (UTC)
- The article is missing info on critcal reception (both from 1976 and today) and box office reception (outside the intro paragraph). Also the article needs to go into the film's legacy. The film came out 30 years ago and people are still running up those steps. A statue was placed by the Museum of Art just this past weekend. Also it should have a brief paragraph on the sequels similar to Halloween (film). Medvedenko 02:29, 12 September 2006 (UTC)
- I've gone got some critical info, It's from a couple respected newspapers and a magazine as well as added a section oninfluence where it talks about the statue and the steps scene. The inline citations have been cleared up, I added a section on video games all that is left to be done is the box office takings which are difficult to cite and as for the sequels I'm a bit iffy on that one, there's little you can say without branching into info belonging in one of the sequels articles
I've been through the article, and there's a number of spelling and grammar errors (try to write less passively). However, I've corrected them :) Also, the fact about the inspiration for Rocky didn't really flow with the lead paragraph, so I removed it and moved the reference down to the Production section. CloudNine 17:10, 11 October 2006 (UTC)
- Cheers, I have been thinking about that one for a while
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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Ruhrfisch 14:15, 13 October 2006 (UTC)
- P.S. The footnotes can be found here for now. Ruhrfisch 14:52, 13 October 2006 (UTC)