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Ramón Emeterio Betances

Article recently passed GA. It is compelling and very comprehensive. It has 110 references and nearly 10,000 words. Only issues arising are copyediting, its lead section, and its length. Suggestions as to how to correct these situations before nominating for FA are welcome. - Mtmelendez ^{(Talk|UB|Home)} 02:20, 6 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I don't understand this sentence:

Since buying the freedom of slave children cost 25 pesos if the child was a slave, and 50 pesos if the child had been freed, Betances, Basora, Segundo Ruiz Belvis and other members of the society waited next to the baptismal font on Sundays, expecting a master to take a slave family to baptize their child.

--Ace Telephone 18:08, 9 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Davnel03 17:06, 16 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]