Wikipedia:Peer review/Philadelphia Phillies seasons/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I am trying to get it close to featured list status. It's part of the Philadelphia Phillies WikiProject and is also listed for review there.
Thanks, Killervogel5 (talk) 17:41, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting list - are there any models to follow (any baseball team season lists that are already FL or perhaps such a list for teams in other sports)? Here are some suggestions, with FLC as the eventual goal.
*The article has no (zero) references given. This is the biggest single obstacle to it becoming FL. While there is a "References" section, these are just notes explaining the table itself and strike shortened seasons, and not anything that would meet WP:V or WP:CITE
- References added for statistics. Killervogel5 (talk) 16:06, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
*The External links section seems to be the source of the statistics cited (i.e. the actual references), but this is not what External links are for - see WP:EL
- Removed. Killervogel5 (talk) 16:06, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
- If a single source is used for most of the data, put it in the appropriate columns header(s).
- If the current External links become references, as internet refs they need URL, title, publisher, author if known, and date accessed. {{cite web}} is useful here.
- I think I would try to give indviidual refs for the awards and probably for the postseason appearances.
*The lead also needs to be referenced.
- Done
- Since they have always been in the National League, why does there need to be an "NL" column in the table?
- This is a convention copied from the New York Yankees seasons table. The Featured List Chicago Bears seasons also has this information in a different sport. It also helps to distinguish between the Phillies franchise and the other franchises that were in Philadelphia. Killervogel5 (talk) 15:28, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
- Any reason this is not a sortable list?
- I've tried to make it sortable but it doesn't work properly due to all of the column-spanning headings and the overall record at the bottom. FL Chicago Bears seasons is also unsortable. Killervogel5 (talk) 15:28, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
*The lead needs a good copyedit - one example: The franchise was also the first professional sports team in American history to 10,000 losses during the 2007 season. needs a verb (to achieve 10,000 losses" or "to reach 10,000 losses") and, as now written, it makes it sound like they did this all in the 2007 season. How about something like On Month Day, 2007, the franchise became the first professional sports team in American history to reach 10,000 losses. (needs a ref too)
*watch POV language with an astounding 111 losses - OK as a quote, not as it is.
- Removed. Killervogel5 (talk) 16:06, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 15:16, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
Everything helps, I will go through and reference all of the statistics. Thank you! Killervogel5 (talk) 15:28, 15 April 2008 (UTC)