Wikipedia:Peer review/Pepsi-Cola/archive1
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This should already be featured, but it is far from it. I cleaned it up from a terrible state not long ago, but now it is lacking context and certainly needs expanding, but what should be added? Lets here all your comments and suggestions! — Wackymacs 23:07, 19 November 2005 (UTC)
- Advertising, packaging and sponsorship of events would probably make for interesting additions. It'd be nice to see the Type of Pepsi section organised into a table or moved to a list and then the section could be expanded to discuss the development of the various types of pepsi. The section on marketshare could use inline cites so the information can be easily verified- a map that shows where pepsi is more popular that coke would be neat too.--nixie 23:59, 24 November 2005 (UTC)
- How about including the jingle? ("Pepsi-Cola hits the spot, 12 full ounces, that's a lot, Twice as much for a nickel too, Pepsi-Cola is the drink for you!") Maybe in the History section near where it mentions the 12-ounce drink? Oylenshpeegul 18:51, 27 November 2005 (UTC)
Some points:
- The lead should be expanded to about 300 words and summarise the article.
- New Bern, North Carolina --> mention country (USA)
- Metric equivalents need to be added.
- America --> United States
- The history is rather weak. I would like to know more on its global operations and growth
- Following the =history=, a section on the product itself must be mentioned. Mention the ingredients, colour, packaging (glass, plastic, aluminium etc) and other details on the product.
- Next the company itself. Who heads pepsi? Also mention sales, profits, penetration etc. (accompany sales with graphs .svg/.png), country-wise distribution etc.
- Follow this by criticisms, remove the subheadings
- Follow with =Rivalry=
- Pepsi in culture: something on how pepsi is now a part and parcel of Generation-Y, ubiquity etc.
- Spokespersons should be renamed and expanded. Include all major countries
- Types of pepsi needs to be put into a neat table and separated from the ==see also==
That's all for now. =Nichalp «Talk»= 07:08, 28 November 2005 (UTC)