Wikipedia:Peer review/Pendulum discography/archive1
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Over the last week I've spent some time bringing this article from a bullet-pointed list up to its present state. I believe it will shortly be ready for WP:FLC so I have started this peer review. I am looking for any comments concerning the prose, layout or style of the article, the validity of its sources, or indeed anything that you feel may help a potential Featured List Candidate. Thanks – Ikara talk → 22:47, 22 September 2008 (UTC)
Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)
- Can you add inline citations to the information in the lead that tells about the singles' charting? Examples:
"Five singles were taken from the album, including "Slam / Out Here", the first single by Pendulum to reach the top forty in the UK Singles Chart."Done"which reached number twenty in the UK charts and was the band's most successful single for almost three years"Done"and was nominated for Best Single at the Kerrang! Awards 2008 ceremony."Done"Pendulum's first release was the double A-side "Spiral / Ulterior Motive" in 2003, before the band relocated to the United Kingdom."Done, but might not be necessary as general references do cover this. I linked to a "by year" discography anyway (general is not sorted by default)
- Feel free to add any more citations that I may have missed here – Ikara talk → 23:14, 27 September 2008 (UTC)
This caption: "Pendulum live at the Electric Ballroom in London during their 2007 tour." is not a full sentence; therefore, there should not be a period at the end.Done"Three singles have been released from In Silico so far, the most successful of these being 'Propane Nightmares',"-->"Three singles have been released from In Silico so far, and the most successful of these is 'Propane Nightmares',"Done although I chose to split this into two sentences omitting the "and" to make it more readable.In the singles table—"Their Law: The Singles 1990-2005" needs an en dash between 1990 and 2005 instead of a hyphen.Done
Dabomb87 (talk) 14:00, 27 September 2008 (UTC)
- Done – Thanks for the comments, they were very helpful – Ikara talk → 23:14, 27 September 2008 (UTC)
Perhaps flesh out the lead a little more—date of founding, who are the band members, any interesting facts and important historical information.- Done, added formation, members and band relocation to the lead. If someone could check the new lead for prose, I'd be grateful.
- A quick scan of the prose indicates that it is fine. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:28, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
- Done, added formation, members and band relocation to the lead. If someone could check the new lead for prose, I'd be grateful.
"Three singles have been released from In Silico so far." Perhaps move "so far" to the beginning of the sentence.Done as below.- What makes the following sites reliable?
http://blog.kerrangawards.com/2008/2008/07/and_the_nominees_are.htmlReplaced with this page which is more reliable, and loads faster.http://theprodigy.info/videography/vp_pendulum.shtml- Replaced with this page. May need to confirm it as reliable.
- Should be OK, as long as you provide this link to the sources used. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:28, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
- Replaced with this page. May need to confirm it as reliable.
http://www.behance.net/bonbonmotion- Replaced with this news article, at least until the company's website is back up.
- This one is questionable, but I'll let others at FLC look at it. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:28, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
- Replaced with this news article, at least until the company's website is back up.
http://www.chartstats.com/artistinfo.php?id=751Reliable, see this articlehttp://norwegiancharts.com/showitem.asp?interpret=The+Prodigy&titel=Out+Of+Space+(Audio+Bullys+Remix)&cat=sReliable, as aboveThe reliability of http://acharts.us/performer/pendulum is disputed, you may need to discuss this with User:Ealdgyth, the FAC and FLC sourcing expert.Removed. I know for a fact that it is not reliable – it gets the peak Australian chart position for In Silico wrong.
Dabomb87 (talk) 02:58, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
- Done – If you could check what I've done, particularly the new sources, it would help a lot. Thanks – Ikara talk → 22:11, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
- Besides that one source, I think this article is ready for FLC. Great job! Dabomb87 (talk) 22:28, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
Comments from Kiac (talk · contribs)
That above suggestion, change "so far" → "to date". Simple.DoneThis article should help you with reliability of some of the above sites.Used, moved to appropriate place above, thanks.Norwegian chart reference doesn't reference "Voodoo People". It references "Out Of Space (Audio Bullys Remix)", which isn't the same song and i don't think it is by Pendulum, so the charting is inaccurate.Under consideration, actually the single was released as a double A-side with "Voodoo People" and the referenced song (which has not been released outside of this single). For some reason the site only acknowledges one of the songs. I may still remove this chart simply due to the difficulty of verifying it, in the meantime I have added a note stating the above.In Albums. Why Warner Music UK in Europe? Does the UK company cover the whole of Europe? I think it would be better off just leaving it as Warner Music.DoneNone of their singles have charted in Australia? Just checking.Checked. Surprisingly enough, no → link ("Coma" is by a different band of the same name)"by Pendulum, and by various other artists" → "by Pendulum, as well as by other artists" ?DoneI'm not entirely sure if there's a policy on this, but you may be better off leaving spaces blank instead of writing "None" or "Unknown".DoneIn Remixes, there is an Album column, even though only one or two of the items in the column are actual albums. Change Album to Appearance maybe?Changed to "Release", seems more appropriateMight be worth using Webcite to archive the band's discography page, bands generally change their websites around every time they release a new album - removing a lot of material, etc. Nothing necessary, just a suggestion.Done, thanks for the suggestion
Hope some of that can provide you with some assistance. Nice article. kiac (talk) 11:08, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
- Done – Thanks for returning the favour, best of luck with the FLC – Ikara talk → 20:34, 28 September 2008 (UTC)