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Partition of Belgium

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I've listed this article for peer review because the time went by since the first review. I think I need some more feedback of the community. Could you please check for NPOV.

Thanks, Vb (talk) 14:58, 17 May 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: This is an interesting article, while it is clear that a lot of work has been put into it, some more is needed to improve it further. Here are my suggestions for improvement:

• The major problem I see is that the article needs many more references (which was mentioned in the previous peer review). My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref. For example the last half of "Regional demographics" and the first two paragraphs of "Political borders" have zero refs. Without more refs this would not pass GA, let along FA. See WP:CITE and WP:V
• Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful.
• Article should have an image in the top right corner - the first image Image:Flanders and Wallonia.png might be a good one, although the orange for Brussels is hard to distinguish from the red.
• Image:Language border (Belgium and France)-en.svg is basically illegible in the article.
• Article still needs a copyedit: some examples Before the beginning of the 20th century, this language border was not exactly corresponding to a borderline between users of Belgian French, standard Dutch and High German as it is today but between a Romance and a Germanic dialect continua. OR In Flanders, the Netherlands, Germany and, Luxembourg, the local dialects better survived at least in the private sphere.
• It is better to attribute opinions to whoever made them, so attribute Some have suggested it become a "European [capital] district", similar to Washington D.C. or the Australian Capital Territory, run by the EU rather than Flanders or Wallonia.[16][17] - who said this? The newspaper? A columnist?
• Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase
• Please use my examples as just that - these are not an exhaustive list and if one example is given, please check to make sure there are not other occurrences of the same problem.
• Ref 1 reads like pure original research - cite this somehow. WP:NOR
• A model article is often useful for ideas on style, refs, structure, etc. There are many FAs at Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Politics_and_government that may be useful as models.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:03, 24 May 2008 (UTC)