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Palestine

Palestine was a WikiProject Palestine collaboration for some time and has been significantly improved by multiple editors. I am looking for feedback on how to further improve the article before submitting it for Featured Article status. Your comments would be very much appreciated. Tiamat 16:29, 19 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I know it's a long article, but any feedback, even on parts, or technical aspects, anything at all, would be very greatly appreciated. It's a crash course in 600,000 years of human habitation and imperial history in a strategic geopolitical location. Check it out. :) Tiamat 00:53, 22 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The article is WAY too long. I recommend creating a new article, "Pre-WWI history of Palestine." All the historical demographic and genetics information should go in that new article. (I wouldn't be surprised if other editors call for the genetics section to be yet its own article. After splitting off that material, the result would be a much more coherent article about modern Palestine, which should definitely include at least a paragraph about current conflicts.

It would be helpful to add a Geography section clarifying the various subregions and notable locations. VisitorTalk 15:55, 23 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I was also thinking of removing the genetics section, since there is already a section covering/duplicating this information at Palestinian people. But I do not really understand the rest of your suggestion. This is about the geographic region of Palestine as defined throughout history based on the progression of empires that passed through. It focuses on the pre-WWI history of Palestine, not Palestine today. Could you expand your suggestion so I can better understand? Thanks. Tiamat 17:19, 23 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry I wasn't clear. "This is about the geographic region of Palestine as defined throughout history based on the progression of empires that passed through." Now I see what you were trying to do. That is a good explanation that makes the article easier to follow. I recommend simply retitling the article to "History of Palestine."

Here's the funny thing. There already is an article entitled History of Palestine which is in pretty bad shape. That article, as I understand in supposed to discuss the historical phases in more detail, while this article, discusses the term Palestine, its origin, its boundaries through history under different rulers, etc. Perhaps both should be merged into one article. But I think there was a reason for having two pages that we might not know. I'll look into more. Tiamat 08:56, 27 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

You're right that the other article and yours are duplicates and should be merged, so there is one "History of Palestine" article from antiquity to the present day - an ambitious undertaking but you seem to be up for it. Good luck! VisitorTalk 09:15, 27 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

We need a Palestine article to discuss that term and its applications and variations through history. But like I said, I'll look into it more and see what can be done. Tiamat 09:45, 27 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]