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Previous peer review


I've listed this article for peer review because… it's failed three FACs this year. It's recently been edited by the GOCE, but before nominating again, I'd like to have some more input from (hopefully) a couple of editors here.

Thanks,  — Calvin999 16:21, 2 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from West Virginia

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Comments from West Virginian (talk) 21:01, 3 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Lede and info box
  • As stated above, the lede meets the criteria outlined at Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section. The lede of this article stands alone as a concise overview and summary of the article. The lede defines the track, establishes context for the track, explains why the track is notable, and summarizes the most important points of the track.
  • The info box is beautifully formatted and its contents are cited within the prose of the article.
  • The image of the single cover has adequate Non-free media information and use rationale – non-free album cover; and the Non-free album cover template is affixed.
  • In the second paragraph, I would suggest reworded the sentence like so: "The song peaked at number one in Australia, New Zealand, Canada and Ireland, and reached the top five in France, Germany and Switzerland."
  • I would also suggest mentioning that the video takes place in an "open natural landscape" as she spends most of her time gyrating in rolling fields.
  • The lede is well-written, its contents are cited below within the text, the references are verifiable, and I have no other comments or suggestions for this section.

Concept and development

  • The image of Sandy Vee is licensed CC BY-SA 3.0 and is therefore suitable for inclusion here. Both the standard and alt captions are good to go.
  • The section is well-written, its contents are cited below within the text, the references are verifiable, and I have no comments or suggestions for this section.

Composition

  • While the first sentence is grammatically correct, it is a bit long and clunky. I would consider splitting this into two sentences. Perhaps after R&B song and the inline citations, begin a new sentence: "The song was composed in the key of F-sharp minor, written in common time with a moderate tempo of 126 beats per minute." Or something like this.
  • The section is well-written, its contents are cited below within the text, the references are verifiable, and I have no comments or suggestions for this section.

Critical response

  • The section is well-written, its contents are cited below within the text, the references are verifiable, and I have no comments or suggestions for this section.

Commercial performance

  • At the end of the first paragraph of the "United Kingdom" subsection, I would suggest using "was featured" rather than "appears" when referring to Rihanna's guest vocals on Eminem's single.
  • The section is otherwise well-written, its contents are cited below within the text, the references are verifiable, and I have no further comments or suggestions for this section. As you can see by this point, I am having to split hairs because this article is already well-written.

Music video

  • The image still from Rihanna's video has the necessary Non-free media information and use rationale and has the "Non-free music video screenshot" template attached.
  • The section is well-written, its contents are cited below within the text, the references are verifiable, and I have no comments or suggestions for this section.

Live performances and covers

  • The image of Rihanna performing "Only Girl (In the World)" on the Loud Tour (2011) is licensed CC BY 2.0 and is therefore acceptable for inclusion here
  • Does there need to be a "the" before BPI since you're using the abbreviation/acronym?
  • The section is otherwise well-written, its contents are cited below within the text, the references are verifiable, and I have no further comments or suggestions for this section.

Formats and track listings

  • This section looks good to go and all the content is sourced and verifiable.

Credits and personnel

  • I'm still new at reviewing articles for music singles, so disregard if I'm off base, but shouldn't "Credits from the liner notes of Loud (Def Jam Recordings, SRP Records)" be at the top of the section with the inline citation. This is not a deal breaker and merely a suggestion/question.

Awards, Charts, Certifications, Radio and digital release history

  • These tables are beautifully formatted and are consistent with other tables in featured articles for singles. All content is cited by verifiable sources.

Thanks for your comments.  — Calvin999 17:21, 7 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]