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Oldham Athletic A.F.C. seasons

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I've recently expanded the article which I created and was hoping to get some feedback before attempting to get it featured. Thanks. :) Latics (talk) 08:27, 24 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from PeeJay2K3 (talk · contribs)

Most of the statements in the "History" section could do with being referenced, even if it's just a case of repeating the ref from the first line.
Any chance that data about the top goalscorers for each season could be listed?
If you can find the data, you should probably include Oldham's performance in the 1945-46 FA Cup.
In the row for the 2005-06 season, "Cup" should be capitalised in "Lancashire Senior Cup".

That's all from me for now. Hope that helps. – Pee Jay 20:10, 24 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from NapHit (talk · contribs)

You shouldn't repeat the name of the list in the lead, look at Sunderland A.F.C. seasons to see how to word the lead better.
"by finishing as runners-up" change to "after finishing as runners-up"
"In the same season, the club earned their first trophy by winning the Lancashire Senior Cup." change to "The club won their trophy during this season, winning the Lancashire Senior Cup".
"It wouldn't be until the 1952–53 season" use would not instead of wouldn't contractions should be avoided
"By the late 1950s, the club was in the Football League Fourth Division and twice had to apply for re-election into the Football League." needs a reference
"runners-up in the Anglo-Scottish Cup as they fell to Burnley 4–1 on aggregate." fell is a bit POV I would change it to lost and perhaps wikilink aggregate?
"in 1989–90 season," add the before 1989-90
"1990 Football League Cup Final." needs wikilinking
"in 1992–93, were founding members of the FA Premier League." should include "the club" after the comma and before were
"gradually fell back into the First Division"not sure what this means exactly I think you should re word it
Do you have information for the top scorers and average attendance for each season as this should be included.

Good luck with the list NapHit (talk) 16:24, 25 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you and PeeJay for the feedback. I really can't find the top scorers, I've been looking for them for a while now and I can only find stats going back to around 1997–98. I guess eventually I'll get around to doing it by going game-by-game. But again, thanks again for the comments. Latics (talk) 18:58, 25 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

IMO, top scorers back to 1997-98 is better than nothing, but you're probably quite right by leaving them out as an FLC reviewer might look upon it as the list being incomplete. All I can suggest is that you invest in some statistical books about the club. – Pee Jay 08:00, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from ChrisTheDude (talk · contribs)

The impression given by the list is that the club has only participated in the Lancs Senior Cup three times in its history, this surely isn't correct. Added to the fact that I would imagine the team that won it in 05/06 was most likely the club's reserves rather than first team, I'd be inclined to omit this competition altogether. -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:58, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, it's an annual competition as far as I know. I know that Manchester United and Liverpool use their reserves for the competition, but I'm not certain on any other teams. I'll look around for recent results and yeah, I'll probably end up removing it altogether. Latics (talk) 09:27, 27 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]