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Not in Love (Crystal Castles song)

I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to get it to FA status.

Thanks, Skyshiftertalk 14:11, 23 December 2024 (UTC)

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I have added this article to the FAC PR sidebar. Please consider reviewing other articles on that list. Z1720 (talk) 21:13, 24 December 2024 (UTC)

CatchMe

• I think "remix" should be linked (both in lead and body) since it's a bit uncommon for people with little knowledge of music. Also based on a recent music FA.
  • Done
• "following the Crystal Castles' release, Smith asked if he could remix a song on the album" - "following the album's release, Smith asked if he could remix one of its tracks". Since Crystal Castles (either the duo or the album) is mentioned five times in the first paragraph.
  • Done
• "Critics found the first version of "Not in Love", a synth-pop song" - I would change it to "A synth-pop song, critics..." for flow.
  • Done
• "Critics found" - found is under MOS:SAID. You should replaced with one of the words listed there.
  • Done
• Replace "synths" with synthesizers, linking it (also based on the recent FA).
  • Done
• "It appeared" - "Commercially, it appeared"
  • Done
• There's eight "version" in the lead. Could a few be replaced with remix?
  • Using "cover" instead
• "and was certified gold" - consider linking "certified gold" to List of music recording certifications.
  • Done
• "in Canada by Music Canada - I think this is redundant.
  • Done
• "Crystal Castles re-recorded it for Crystal Castles (2010)" - "Crystal Castles covered it for their eponymous 2010 studio album". Also linking covered.
  • Done
• I would remove "according to a press release" for flow.
  • Removed the sentence altogether
• "but they did end up on the album" - "but ended up on the album"?
  • Done
• "asked if he could remix a song on Crystal Castles" - "asked if he could remix one of its tracks".
  • Done
• Unless I'm missing something, the sources do not say the UK release "never happened".
  • Removed, though the article may imply that the release happened when it didn't.
• Maybe "alongside a Nic Brown-directed music video" could be added to the lead after the mention of the single release.
  • Added "alongside a music video"
• I would separate Bick and Jacobs' opinions.
  • They seem to be opposites. I think it is okay as it is.
• "Pytlik of Pitchfork" - it is already stated that he is from Pitchfork.
  • Done
• "Pitchfork named the re-recording with Smith "Best New Track"" - "Pitchfork named "Best New Track" the re-recording with Smith"?
  • This phrasing feels strange
• You could paraphrase some of the quotes from the Robert Smith version subsection.
  • Done
• "best songs of 2010 by the likes of" - IMO "the likes of" is unnecessary.
  • Done
• "peaked at 90" - "peaked at number 90".
  • Done
• I think "In Canada" (under Commercial performance) is unnecessary since it is already stated in the name of the following chart and certification organization.
  • Unsure as I begin each sentence with the country name
• The Track listing shouldn't be here per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Music#Track listing.
  • Done
• The titles of the citations should be with title case per MOS:CT.
  • They can also be consistently in sentence case, as it is the case with some FAs such as Worlds (Porter Robinson album).
    • Thanks for the clarification! CatchMe (talk · contribs) 00:36, 8 January 2025 (UTC)
• All refs should be archived for consistency.
  • Done
• Link all magazines/websites/publications in the citations for consistency.
  • Unless I missed something this is already done.
    • My apologies. Thought that UnderTheRadar referred to the American magazine. CatchMe (talk · contribs) 00:36, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

This is all I could say at the moment. It's my first time participating on a PR, so my apologies if there's something wrong or not needed. CatchMe (talk · contribs) 22:01, 6 January 2025 (UTC)

Thank you! Skyshiftertalk 20:28, 7 January 2025 (UTC)