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Nenets Herding Laika

I've listed this article for peer review because it’s a new article

Thanks, Annwfwn (talk) 18:02, 5 March 2022 (UTC)

Review

@Annwfwn: Hello! Thank you for your creation of this article and others, they look to be well written and important. I'm not a dog expert, but I can give some pointers on how to polish this article. If you want any more specific feedback, please just let me know, but here are my first impressions on the article:

• "dog originating from the Yamalo-Nenets Autonomous Okrug, Russia"
• Link "Nenets people"
• "While most famous as the progenitor of the Samoyed dog, Nenets Herding Laika almost died out during the Soviet era due to lack of interest in preserving genetically purebred examples." This sentence could do with a bit of rephrasing. These seem like two separate ideas, and there is probably more encyclopedic wording than "most famous"
• "In 1994, the Russian Kynologic Federation (RKF) approved the first official standard of the breed." If you were looking to expand the article, these standards would fit in really well. They are alluded to here in the lead, but never elaborated upon. As a reader, I am curious as to what the "official" description of this breed would be.
• "Prized for their efficiency as both a reindeer herding dog and a hunter..." prized by whom?
• "Kola Peninsula to Chukotka" could be linked
• The info on explorers using the dogs could be split into a separate paragraph
• Maybe talk about how Borisov used the dogs?
• In regards to the Nansen expedition, my personal opinion is that this is the most interesting part of the article. Is there any more information about this? The fact that these dogs formed the base of a new breed is intriguing, and perhaps briefly speaking to the science of how that occurs would improve the article
• "Fortunately, several small populations" I would steer away from "fortunately." Probably just "However" or a similar word would suffice
• "2000" should be "2,000"
• "There are currently estimated to be around 2000 purebred Nenets Herding Laika herding reindeer in Yamalo-Nenets Autonomous Okrug." The source is dated to 2020, so this could have changed since then. Probably change to "As of 2020, there were estimated..."
• "Nenets Herding Laika with faimily" faimily-->family
• "In 1994, the Russian Kynologic Federation (RKF) approved the first official standard of the breed. is still not registered in the catalog of the International Cynological Federation (FCI)." Second sentence is a fragment
• For the references, it is good practice to translate the titles into English. There should be a module to do this in the reference template, if you can't find it let me know

Again, thanks for your articles, and let me know if you have further questions on this review or want any input on other articles! Best wishes, Fritzmann (message me) 01:06, 30 March 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for the excellent review, I have implemented all your suggestions. I’d love for you to review any other articles I have made. Perhaps the Laika page, as it’s rather large an unwieldy… I do need to go back and look at references to add English translated titles. Annwfwn (talk) 12:04, 30 March 2022 (UTC)

@Annwfwn: yeah no problem! For this article and Laika, I think the biggest missing piece of info would be more specific descriptions and guidelines of what makes a Nenets herding Laika that specific breed and what makes a Laika a Laika. Also in the Laika article, the Etymology and History sections should be split up, and the History section could do with some subsections to improve readability.

It looks like you really have a good handle on this subject, so thank you again for contributing your knowledge. My recommendation would be to look at some dog breed Good Articles like Pyrenean Mountain Dog, Russkiy Toy, or many others. Those have a pretty comprehensive spread of information you can use as a guide. If you have an article that you think could get to Good Article status, drop me a ping! I'd love to help polish it and guide you through the nomination process. As I said, if you have any questions don't hesitate to drop me a line. Fritzmann (message me) 15:01, 31 March 2022 (UTC)