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Morocco in World War II

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like some templates, I have worries it is not set out properly or that my explanations may be too complex. I am also wondering what wikiproject it would belong to.

Thanks, 113ADP68 (talk) 23:50, 17 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments: G'day, 113ADP68, thank you for your efforts so far. I had a quick look and have a few suggestions. Unfortunately, I don't know much about the topic, so I can only give you general advice, I'm sorry: AustralianRupert (talk) 11:13, 3 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

the lead probably needs expansion to adequately summarise the whole article - probably two or three paragraphs in this instance
in the lead, link "Axis", "Allies", "Vichy France" etc.
link Vichy France on first mention
in the References, avoid using all caps per MOS:ALLCAPS
where Churchill and Roosevelt -- add full names and wikilinks on first mention, and explain who these people were
In the lead up to the beginning of World War II --> "In the lead up to World War II"
Sultan Mohammad V: --> remove the colon here as it isn't necessary
same as above for Medical care on the Moroccan frontier:
are there any photographs that can be added? I would suggest adding one to the lead, and a couple more in the body of the article. Commons is likely to have some
I suggest maybe adding an Aftermath section to discuss the lasting impacts, if there were any (e.g on society, the economy, etc)
wikilink "Operation Torch" on first mention
General Schaeffer: full name and wikilink (if one exists) on first mention
many rapings and killings --> "many rapes and murders"?
in the mediterranean theatre --> capitalise "Mediterranean"
Mount Cassino --> "Monte Cassino"? Also, I suggest wikilinking the article on the battle here
add a wikilink for "Gustav line"...overall, I think there are probably quite a few terms or names that need wikilinking in the article, so I would suggest checking for these throughout (add a link first time the term or name is mentioned, if the subject is notable)
overall, I'd suggest you list the article for a copy edit over at WP:GOCE, so that you can get another set of eyes on it
anyway, that's it from me. Good luck with developing it further.