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Monstercat

Previous peer review

I've listed this article for peer review because I am working to get this article to GA status and am looking for steps to improve the article before nomination.

Thanks, Jalen Folf (talk) 06:29, 3 January 2020 (UTC)

Thoughts from Lee V

Hi JalenFolf. Here's a few things I picked up on.

Lede

• "independent electronic dance music record label" - WP:SEAOFBLUE, could do with rewording/removing some links.
• The refs in the lede aren't really neccesary. Should be cited in prose.
• Is the mascot really the most important part of the article? I'd move it down the lede, if not remove entirely.
• meme should be linked.

General prose

• I think an "overview" section wouldn't be misplaced. It jumps straight into the history of the orginasation without saying what it is, what it does, etc.
• "Beginning" is a weird title, something like "founding" makes more sense.
• Is it normal to put DOBs for people not in BLPs?
• Whilst I know British Colombia is in Canada, the article doesn't mention this is Canadian outside of the lede sentence and infobox.
• (born 1989)[4] and Ari Paunonen (born 1989/90[4]) - refs should go ideally after punctuation.
• Today, the label signs artists on a single-track basis - seems out of place on a section on origins.
• The massive quote borders on copyright issues. Even if not, it's quite promotional to copy a press release like this.
  • This happens a lot
• Article is very "In X month, Y year..."
• There's some sentence structure issues, with paragraphs often being just one or two sentences.
• Does the dynamic list for the current artist land a little close to WP:FANCRUFT? Seems a little in depth for me.
• Are all the albums notable? There's some that have articles. If they are notable, they should be WP:REDLINKed.

Also be aware Earwigs CV check comes up with this: [1]

I hope some of the above is helpful to you to take the item towards GA. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:46, 18 January 2020 (UTC)