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Miranda Cosgrove

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I've listed this article for peer review because its a decent sized article and has plenty of information on her, and yet it's listed as a start. just need input on how to make it better.

Thanks, Phaeton23 (talk) 14:51, 17 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.^[?]
If there is not a free use image in the top right corner of the article, please try to find and include one.^[?]
You may wish to consider adding an appropriate infobox for this article, if one exists relating to the topic of the article. ^[?] (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
The article will need references. See WP:CITE and WP:V for more information.^[?]
Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.^[?]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, —mono 00:59, 18 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: I see this did not get any comments beyond the semi-automated peer review, so here are some suggestions for improvement. While it is clear that a lot of work has gone into this (thanks!), I think it needs some more work before it owuld be ready for GAN.

The lead does not meet WP:LEAD - it should be longer than one paragraph and should be a summary of the whole article. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way.
As a summary, nothing should be be in just the lead - it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. However, her salary for iCarly is only in the lead that I can see.
I think one of the two head shots would be a better lead image - it is harder to tell from the current lead image what she looks like (I would still use it in the article).
Since she was in 60 episodes on Drake and Josh over four seasons, I would have much more about it in the article. Currently there are two paragraphs on School of Rock (although one is quite short), and only one on Drake and Josh. See WP:WEIGHT
There are a few short (one or two sentence) paragraphs which interrupt the flow of the article. Can they be combined with others or perhaps expanded?
Per WP:CITE references generally come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase. If something is referenced once in a sentence, I does not need a second ref in the same sentence - so fix things like Cosgrove was born in Los Angeles, California to Tom, who owns a dry cleaning business,[3] and Chris, a stay-at-home mother.[3]
While it has a lot of references, it seems like the article needs more references, for example her first appearance in Smallville has no ref that I could see. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
Many of the refs are imcomplete in terms of the information they give and are just a link or a URL. Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful.
Most articles on actors and/or singers have a Personal life section.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 17:03, 3 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]