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Mini Moke

Hi! I want to put this article up for WP:GAC soon and would greatly appreciate someone with an eye for 'good English' taking a look at it. I'm pretty much 100% sure that all of the technical details are right - but it is in need of a 'polish' of the kind that I'm not good at doing!

Mini Thanks!

SteveBaker 22:19, 17 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

(Oh - also: The article is currently rated a 'B' on the Wikipedia:WikiProject Automobiles/Assessment assessment scale. I have already attended to the comments they had and I'll get them to take another look at it after WP:GAC.) SteveBaker 22:34, 17 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

References go after fullstops not before or in the middle of a sentence. The article is also missing a lot of full-stops. That table at the end is too big and ugly, editors prefer articles to have no horizontal scroll. The article has alot of weasel words. Try remove words like However, Whilst. This sentence doesnt make much sense, The engine, gearbox, suspension and most mechanical parts are identical to those of a standard Mini, "most mechanical parts" remove that part and try get someone from wikiproject cars to give it a good copy-edit. Good-luck M3tal H3ad 06:00, 18 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks - this is exactly the kind of help I need! I'll get on to fixing those things ASAP. SteveBaker 16:16, 18 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I've cleaned up the referemces, checked for missing full-stops, narrowed the table considerably and tried to find and eliminate weasel words. The bad sentence is fixed. I'd appreciate it if someone could give it another reading. Thanks! SteveBaker 11:45, 20 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 22:53, 18 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

This Peer review has done it's job and it's now archived. Many thanks to those who contributed. SteveBaker 17:14, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]