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I want this to become a featured article, and I would like a fresh look at this article before I nominate it.

Thanks, Albacore (talk) 05:41, 25 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Giants2008 – There were quite a few niggling prose issues and such that I found, but most of them will be fairly easy to remedy. I think you've gotten about as much as possible out of the article, so you have that going for you. I'd encourage you to bring it to FAC after the PR is over. We always need new nominators at FAC, and the worst that can happen is the article improving, which will happen even if it doesn't get promoted.

  • I know the height and weight of a player is hard to put in the body of an article, but content that is in the lead should be placed into the body of an article in some way, and cited there. If this could be added to the Major league career section, it would be an improvement.
  • Left in lead, removed reference from lead, put a similar thought and reference in the body.
  • Collegiate career: "To compensate for a loss in velocity of his fastball". Needs "the" before "velocity", I think.
  • Changed.
  • "as the Longhorns finished at a 61–14 record...". "at" → "with"?
  • Changed.
  • Chicago Cubs: Typo at the end of "Capel no longer pitched sidarmed."
  • Changed.
  • "he lead the Midland club in losses". "lead" → "led"?
  • Changed.
  • "In 1986, Capel became a straight relief pitcher". Was he a part-time or full-time starting pitcher before this point? If so, that appears to be worth a mention.
  • Mentioned his games started in 1984.
  • Removing the comma from "while leading his team in saves, with 13" would be good, as there seems to be a bit too much punctuation in this sentence.
  • Changed.
  • For 1988, we have two "make the team"s very close together. Try varying the writing a bit more for better prose.
  • Varied.
  • It now reads "Slated to make the MLB team as their 10th and final pitcher, the Cubs assigned Capel...". Sounds like the Cubs were slated, not Capel; I think the opposite is what you're trying to get across. To fix the sentence, try "Capel was assigned to Triple-A by the Cubs after they acquired Mike Bielecki from the Pittsburgh Pirates." Giants2008 (Talk) 02:15, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Re-written.
  • "When Al Nipper was supposed to become the Cubs fifth starter on April 23". Apostrophe needed at end of team name.
  • Changed.
  • Milwaukee Brewers: Another apostrophe needed at the end of the team name, in the first sentence.
  • Changed.
  • "for a MLB roster spot." "a" → "an".
  • Changed.
  • Might be a good idea to link strikeout if you haven't already, as that's a jargony item that could use the link.
  • This is linked in the lead; should I link it again?
  • If it's only linked in the lead, you can get away with having another link in the body. FAC reviewers like myself usually complain when there are multiple links to something in the body, but that isn't the case here. Giants2008 (Talk) 02:15, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Linked on first appearance outside of lead.
  • Houston Astros: Score needs flipping in "a 1–4 loss."
  • Fixed.
  • "Statistically, Capel's 1991 season was the best of his MLB career, recording a 3.03 ERA over 25 games." Reads like the season recorded the stats, not Capel, which I don't believe was the intention. To fix this, consider putting "as he recorded" after the comma.
  • Changed.
  • The last two sentences of this section need references.
  • I added a reference for the AAA stats, but I don't think there is a reference saying the Astros did not re-sign him. I put the Baseball-Reference page as a reference here, though.
  • Personal life: "Capel testified on Clemens work ethic and character." Apostrophe needed at end of Clemens' name.
  • Changed.
  • Reference 24 needs a publisher.
  • Added.
  • For the most part, it looks like you've exhausted the relevant literature, but I've found a few additional items that may help address any comprehensiveness concerns reviewers may have. This appears to be a newspaper article that isn't currently used, the only such material I was able to readily found. If there's something useful in here, it would be great to include it.
  • I'll buy this sometime close to Christmas.
  • Ref 5 states that Capel set Spring High School pitching records. Is there anything else that can be found on this? Even with this little known, I think this is worth a mention.
  • Mentioned that he set several records. The Spring High School website has an individual records page, but there is nothing there. Nothing from the Wayback Machine either.
  • This New York Times article says Capel started and won a game in the 1982 Amateur World Series, which I think is a useful detail. It beats just saying that he was on the team.
  • Added.

Giants2008 (Talk) 02:49, 8 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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