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I've listed this article for peer review because I have updated it with appropriate images, stronger citations, and more thorough content than it had previously and would like to have it reevaluated for higher rating than simply start.
Thanks, Hollykatharine (talk) 21:33, 25 January 2020 (UTC)
- Thoughts from paul2520
Hi, Hollykatharine! Thanks for your impressive efforts on the article. The pictures definitely enhance the content. A couple areas for improvement (and not necessarily to your edits):
- The Voice should not be linked eight times in the student newspaper section. In fact, I'm not a huge fan of external links directly in the text (especially since they're already in the External links section). Could you convert them to references? A quick glance at Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Linking seems to suggest references are best.
- The image currently captioned "Trey-Anastasio2009 2" should have a better caption.
- I wonder if the MCTV 26 and WWFM sections should be subsections in the Clubs section?
- I made a couple edits to the page myself, including using the
{{quote}}instead of the italicized text in the "Mission" section. Do you think it looks better?
Otherwise, I think the page looks great! = paul2520 (talk) 17:12, 8 February 2020 (UTC)
- Response to paul2520
Hi, Paul2520! Thanks for the good advice. I removed the excess hyperlinks as you suggested. I think you're right that the "Mission" section looks better as you've formatted it. I also updated the caption for the Trey Anastasio photo. I think the MCTV 26 and WWFM aren't clubs so they are okay as is. I appreciate your help. Hollykatharine (talk) 03:10, 9 February 2020 (UTC)
- Comments from Username6892
A couple of things I found:
- Given the size of the article, the lead is very long. MOS:LEADLENGTH says that articles of about that size should have leads that are about 2 paragraphs and this one is 4 paragraphs. I think paragraphs 2-4 are unnecessarily long for the lead.
- "it is known for strength in soccer, baseball and softball" I don't think that claim can be verified with only one season's statistics cited.
Other than that, this article is in good shape. Username6892 04:06, 7 March 2020 (UTC)