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I've listed this article for peer review because… I want to know what needs to be done, so the article can become an FA.

Thanks, --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:47, 1 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Casliber

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Good choice to get to FA :) I'll drop some notes. Sorry if I sound a bit abrupt at times - it looks promising. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:23, 6 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Growing steadily in popularity from the 1997 film, he has since matched up with A-list actors in mainstream films, and today is rated among the top actors in Hollywood. - this sentence is a bit vague, what are you getting at with the first link to 1997 - do you mean all films he made that year or...? Also, 'matched up with', do you mean..what, starred on eaqual billing with?
  • 2nd para of lead is a wee bit listy, maybe reclassify films by saying 'the adventure films' or the comedies' or by years or whatever. have a play with it.


  • but kept leaving classes to pursue acting projects - ditto. Not sure what works best here. Maybe 'but chose to defer classes to pursue acting projects' (?)
  • Damon and Ben Affleck developed a thriller about a young math genius, which they pitched around Hollywood. Receiving advice from writer/director/actor Rob Reiner, screenwriter William Goldman, and their friend writer/director Kevin Smith,[10] the two changed the script around to focus on a young math genius trying to make his way in the world. - sounds odd as it says they changed it around but the beginning and end bits don't reflect any change. Should maybe elaborate a little here


  • Second half of Breakthrough section is listy, this could and should be elaborated wuite a bit. I am sure there are interviews where Damon discusses his roles in some depth.
  • The Philanthropy could probably have the same input. bit listy as is

The article is only 34kb, so plenty of room to grow. Not too bad as is, but be wary of bits which sound a bit colloquial. I am not a Damon expert so cannot comment too muich more on comprehenisveness. I will think more upon it. Good luck. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:23, 6 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]