Wikipedia:Peer review/Matisyahu/archive1

Matisyahu

The article has just undergone some fairly significant rewriting and improvement, I'd like some feedback as to other areas of the article that could be improved in the hopes of nominating it for good article status soon. Thanks for your input! -- Chabuk ^{[ T • C ]} 06:00, 4 January 2007 (UTC)

• Comments from Heaven's Wrath
  • References should be placed after punctuation (if there is any) and no space should be left after it. (See WP:FOOT.)
  • You might want to see about using citation templates. (See WP:REF.)
  • In the "TV and Radio appearances" section, the numbered list is confusing. I think it would be better as either bullets or you reorder the list by date. Example of second option below.
    • 2004: Jimmy Kimmel Live
    • 2004: Last Call with Carson Daly
    • 2004: Steve Harvey's Big Time Challenge
  • Also, I am not sure of the notability of the "TV and Radio appearances" section. It does not seem to important, but I am more concerned with the style with which it is presented.
  • Numbers between 0 and 10 are normally spelled out as words. I fixed one instance, but I think I saw another. Although do not spell the number if it is part of Top 5.
  • The "Music video" section should probably be expanded. Maybe you could discuss themes or styles of the videos. I think that section would benefit from some more information. Otherwise talk about the videos on the song's page, and remove that section from the article.
  • I did not get a chance to read the whole article, and I need to leave so I might be back.

– Heaven's Wrath   ^Talk  05:52, 8 January 2007 (UTC)

• Done. -- Chabuk ^{[ T • C ]} 22:45, 16 January 2007 (UTC)