Wikipedia:Peer review/Manetho/archive1

Manetho

A very well-written article, mostly developed by Joel Ng of Singapore. I would like to get improvements and suggestions in (before submitting it as a FAC). In particular, if anyone can upload an artistic representation of Manetho, that would be great. --Peter Kirby 02:24, 14 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Who is Joel Ng? I don't see his name in the history of this article.

I noticed that a number of links that originally pointed to a number of existing articles, & now are red. If you are serious about FAC status, I would suggest that you go back & re-check all of these links, & perhaps change the spelling to conform to existing usage. (If you can prove that your version of the names are more correct, perhaps you should make an argument that those articles be moved.)

Although your transmission chart is informative, the areas around the text have a grey pallor & need to be cleaned up.

If you are interested in Ancient Egypt, please help out at Wikipedia:WikiProject Ancient Egypt.

But what is presently on this page is a more extensive treatment than what was there before. -- llywrch 23:08, 15 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Joel Ng is an online friend. Joel Ng wrote the text and released it under the GNU FDL; I merged it into the Wikipedia article for him. I have fixed some of the red links. I have fixed the transmission chart. Finally, I have added a hieroglyphic for "Gift of Thoth," a popular supposition about what "Manetho" was in the Egyptian language. --Peter Kirby 04:56, 23 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

You've given a number of references, but it's not clear which reference covers which topics. If it was it would help with verifiability very much. One possibility would be a system of inline references such as footnotes. Mozzerati 21:26, August 24, 2005 (UTC)