Wikipedia:Peer review/Madison Grant/archive1

Madison Grant

I've been kicking this article around for awhile, and I'd be interested in hearing ways it could be improved or restructered by outside parties. It could also probably use some copy editing, if you're up for that. I think this fellow is a strange and overlooked figured in U.S. history, and take some pride in the fact that, even in a disorganized and incomplete state, our Wikipedia article is more comprehensive (and tries to be fairly NPOV, though improvements in that direction might be warranted too) than anything else about him on the internet. Your advice for improvement is humbly requested. --Fastfission 17:51, 2 October 2005 (UTC)

Really intersting topic- the article does do a good job of staying neutral. First up the lead needs to be expanded to summarise the articles content. In the early life section I think the reason why his first politicial association was impotant should be explained- and there needs to be something added to lead into the remainder of the article. One things that I think needs some clarification is this sentence:

his work as a conservationist has been somewhat ignored and obscured, as many organizations with which he was once associated do not generally want to overstress their connections with him

would it be possible to back this up with a specific reference or some other form of evidence? It'd probably be good to provide some specific examples of scholars that use him as an example too. I've added a few little things from his entry in the American National Biography - I can send you the text if you don't have access, just email me.--nixie 05:30, 3 October 2005 (UTC)

• • Thanks, those are some good things to think about. --Fastfission 18:17, 9 October 2005 (UTC)