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Lost Our Lisa

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Stable WP:GA rated article, successfully added as part of promoted featured topic, The Simpsons (season 9). Looking for any feedback on ways to improve this article further, and suggestions/recommendations as it moves along in quality status.

Thanks, Cirt (talk) 09:22, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Posted notice about this peer review at talkpages of WP:DOH, WP:TV, WP:US-TOON, and WP:COMEDY. Cirt (talk) 09:26, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: I like this episode very much and the article is generally well-written, so most of my suggestions are going to be fairly nit-picky.

The article seems a bit short, especially if the ultimate goal is FA. Will mention a few places to possibly expand below.
Per WP:LEAD, the lead should probably be two paragraphs for this length article.
Perhaps The episode contains the last appearance of character Lionel Hutz.[1] would read better?
The image is great, how about the caption tweak Homer and Lisa listening to the song played by the Orb of Isis
Since there are 25 FA class articles on the Simspons, there are plenty of model artilces to look at. I picked "A Streetcar named Marge" (ah, alphabetical order) and noted it has a Cultutral References section, which seems like a possibility here. It also has a merchandise section (not sure that one would apply here).
Are the Nielsen ratings for the original air date available?
The Production section is a bit choppy - any way to introduce it with a "The production team faced several challenges on this episode..." lead in? Also is there anything on the music here?

I hope this helps - I can't think of too much else to add. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 11:46, 14 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you I will try to look into these recommendations - though further expansion of the article may prove difficult as it has been hard to find additional secondary sources. Cirt (talk) 11:48, 14 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Responses:

Perhaps The episode contains the last appearance of character Lionel Hutz.[1] would read better? -- Done. Cirt (talk) 11:38, 16 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The image is great, how about the caption tweak Homer and Lisa listening to the song played by the Orb of Isis -- Done. Cirt (talk) 11:38, 16 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"The production team faced several challenges on this episode..." lead in? -- Done. Cirt (talk) 11:38, 16 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Hrm, not sure about Nielsen ratings, will try to look into that further. Cirt (talk) 15:50, 28 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]