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Little Athletics

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I've listed this article for peer review because it just passed a GA review. I would like to take to FAC and any suggestions would be welcome.

Thanks in advance, NickGibson3900 ^Talk 10:10, 4 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by EricEnfermero

I'm happy to leave some comments. Keep in mind that I have not completed many peer reviews.

I notice that the article is titled Little Athletics, but the organization's website seems to refer to itself as Little Athletics Australia.

@EricEnfermero: Little Athletics Australia is the governing body, not the name of the competitions.

In the lead, the language could be a little tighter. Ex.: "compete in the competitions" is redundant.

Done

Under Structure and Governance, "They are sections of centres..." - unclear on exactly what this means.

Done

The History section covers a relatively brief period and creates a gap of ~40 years where we're left to wonder what happened.
I don't find it useful to have both a timeline and a detailed history. The lead can help to summarize the most significant events.

Removed

The direct quotes in this section aare distracting to me. I think you can paraphrase how many people attended an event, for example.

Paraphrased

"There would be 14 meets..." - Do you mean that 14 meets were scheduled? Did they happen before support for the organization ran out?

Done

Re: the Current section. WP:WTW discourages the use of relative time references. Is there a better section title?

Unfortunately there isn't a better title I can think of

EricEnfermero ^HOWDY! 11:57, 4 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]