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List of mayors of Hamburg

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I've improved this list over the last months and would like to take it to featured lists. I'd be pleased to receive any advice or comments as to how this list might be improved, in terms of prose, style, anything else.

Thanks, Sebastian scha. (talk) 15:37, 6 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Note: Please don't ask me to review articles, I'm not a native speaker and think my style, tone, grammar and spelling is too bad. I'm sorry, Sebastian scha. (talk) 15:40, 6 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

Article needs more references, for example the information in the lead that is not also in the list should be referenced. The tables also need refs - assuming all of the information is from a few sources, this can go in the top of the table. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
I would make the format of all of the tables consistent - do not collapse some tables or make some just rows of data and not actual tables. Also any reason why these are not sortable tables?
As you note, the language needs to be cleaned up - this needs a copyedit. You can ask for help at WP:PRV in the first section (people willing to do copyedits). "Scripture" in English refers almost exclusively to religious writing (Heiliger Schrift), for example.
If you are going to have a "Note" column, then please use it. Otherwise, get rid of it.

Hope this helps. I won't ask you to review something else. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 01:29, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank very much. I'm busy at the moment, but will try to change the points.

The note column is because to make the table consistent (but I'll try to add some more information on the mayors).
The list not in table style should be changed in a visible table? Okay I'll do it.
As for references, it's hard to add them and not do OR. (The main source, the list at the official Hamburg website is offline.)
The tables are not sortable because I thought this should be chronolocigal. At the beginning I thought, there should be some sortable columns; but as for start or end-term dates, some are years only, some are with day and month, that is not really sortable.

Again, thank you. Greetings Sebastian scha. (talk) 10:45, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]