Wikipedia:Peer review/List of The Office (U.S. TV series) episodes/archive1
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What is this list missing to become a FL? Thanks, Nergaal (talk) 12:27, 4 September 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- These span
overfour seasons, while a fifth season is scheduled to air starting in fall 2008. Why not give the actual September date of the first episode of the fifth season in the US?
- It is stated later in the introduction. I am not sure it is worth burdening the first paragraph with a date would help. Nergaal (talk) 02:52, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
- Awkward sentence - needs to be split into two or cleaned up Created as an adaptation by Greg Daniels of the British series The Office that was originally created by Stephen Merchant and Ricky Gervais, it is a mockumentary that follows the day-to-day lives of the employees of the Scranton, Pennsylvania branch of Dunder Mifflin, a paper supply company.[1]
- This makes it sound like the seasons were the same number of episodes This was followed by a full-length second season in 2005–2006, and another full-length one, in 2006–2007. but they were not - I would give the numbers of episodes in each season.
- I think the article would look better if all the tables were the same width.
- I am not sure how to do that. Nergaal (talk) 02:59, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
- Identify who Roy Anderson is within the show (warehouse guy) in ... while she struggles with her relationship with Roy Anderson (David Denman).
- Needs a ref perhaps It featured 23 episodes, including two hour-long editions, and guest directors such as J.J. Abrams (creator of ABC series Alias, Lost, and the movie Cloverfield), Joss Whedon (creator of Buffy the Vampire Slayer and Firefly) and Harold Ramis.
- In the notes, why not combine the two without symbols, i.e. "Producers' cut versions are not included." and "Episode titles are subject to change."
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:44, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
- Ok, thanks for the feedback. I still have those two clarifications to work on, but otherwise should I go ahead and nominate this for FLC? Nergaal (talk) 03:08, 12 September 2008 (UTC)