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I have based this list on the current Featured Lists: List of Alabama Crimson Tide football seasons, List of Maryland Terrapins football seasons, List of Oklahoma Sooners football seasons and List of Virginia Tech Hokies football seasons with the hope of having this list achieve similar status. I have compiled the list in the last few weeks from scratch and would like any advice on what needs to be done to improve it. I have done as much as possible to make sure everything is sourced.

Thanks, NThomas (talk) 21:20, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: The table generally looks good to me, but I see quite a few minor glitches related to prose and style. I fixed a couple of small things, and I list quite a few more below.

Lead

  • There has been a trend away from starting each list with the boilerplate "This is a list". Two of the three other featured articles (Crimson Tide and Terrapins) you mention using as models start in a different way. You might consider recasting to make this one start in a fresh way.
    • To me, it just doesn't seem right to not have a bold title in the first line. Unless it comes up in the FL comments, I'll keep it the way it it.
  • "since the team's inception in 1925". I would suggest unlinking any dates in the article that don't relate to the article's content in a fairly specific way. This one, for example, links merely to the year in question, whereas the next one, 1932, links to a football season. You should probably review each date link and decide whether it is helpful or not.
    •  Done I changed the years to college football seasons.
  • "and 1960–present" - Rather than "present", which is inherently ambiguous since it means something different from moment to moment and year to year, it would be better to fill in the missing number.
    • If I read in a person's biography that was still alive and saw the current year, I'd assume they had died that year. I'm going to keep it as "present" because the team is still a member of the conference.
  • "The Texas Tech Red Raiders football team compete... " - "Team" is singular, but "compete" is plural. "Competes"?
    •  Done
  • "The team was known as the "Matadors" from 1925–1936," - "from 1925 to 1936"? The hyphen doesn't scan well as a word in a construction like this.
    •  Done
  • "to reflect the influence of the campus' Spanish Renaissance architecture." - Slightly better might be "to reflect the influence of the Spanish Renaissance architecture." This and the phrase with "to" instead of a hyphen are easier to read out loud, which is what I mean by "scan".
    •  Done
  • "and resulted in a 6–7 loss to the... " - Shouldn't the winning score come first; i.e., 7–6?
    •  Done
  • "In 1932, the Texas Tech joined... " - Delete "the"?
    •  Done
  • "the nickname they have today" - Perhaps "the nickname the team has today"? This would avoid the slight singular-plural problem.
    •  Done
  • "The team remained in the SWC until the conference ceased operations 1996." - "operations in 1996"?
    •  Done
  • "The Red Raiders have the distinction of being the only one in the Big 12 to have a winning season each year since the conference was created in 1996." - Tighten to "Texas Tech is the only team in the Big 12 with a winning record each year since 1996, when the conference began."?
    •  Done
  • "Described as a program on the rise," - Since this is a judgment, it might be challenged and should probably have an inline citation to a source supporting this specific claim.
    •  Done

Seasons

  • Some of the scores in the table need en dashes instead of hyphens.
    •  Done

Notes

  • Note 3 needs some attention. For example "three way tie" should be "three-way tie", and the second instance of "head to head games" should be "head-to-head games". The long sentence beginning with "Because the first four tie-breakers did not dictate a winner... " is too complex and needs to be recast as two or three separate sentences. November 30 should not be linked.
    •  Done I did the best I could while keeping the same information in the footnote and fixed the Nov. 30 link.

References

  • The last three citations are incomplete.
    •  Done Removed a dead link left other two citations that still provide same information.
  • What makes fansonly.com a reliable source?
    •  Done It isn't, that's for the catch. I found the information it was based off of from the Big 12 Conference website and changed the citation with the reliable host.

General

  • The image needs alt text, which is meant for readers who can't see the images. WP:ALT has details.
    •  Done
  • The dabchecker tool finds one link "Tangerine Bowl" that goes to a disambiguation page rather than the intended target.
    •  Done
  • The link checker finds one dead url in the citations.
    •  Done Removed the dead citation

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 18:08, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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