Wikipedia:Peer review/List of San Francisco Municipal Railway lines/archive1
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I'm trying preparing the list for WP:FL, and see if it is anywhere near the criteria (and if so, make it conform more to it). Any and all constructive suggestions are welcome. —kurykh 22:00, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: This is interesting and obviously has had a lot of work put into it, but I think it needs more work before it meets WP:WIAFL. Here are some suggestions for improvement.
- I am pretty sure list articles no longer have to start with "This is a list..." (although they used to). A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow, see WP:FL. While there do not seem to be any FLs of transit routes, there are several of stations, such as List of Bay Area Rapid Transit stations
- Per the MOS, the article should have at least one image - perhaps a cable car, a bus, and a Muni Metro light rail train?
- The biggest problem I see with the article is a near complete lack of references - the article needs inline citations as well as external refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- There is one thing under references, but it needs more information. Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Any reason why the list is not sortable?
- Since the format of the tables is the same (same columns) in almost all cases, the tables should be set to be the column same widths for a more uniform appearance.
- Any chance of a map of SF so those unfamiliar with the city have some idea of the major locations refered to?
- Avoid one sentence paragraphs (like the first one in the lead) by merging them with others or perhaps expanding them.
- Last sentence in lead has a plural subject and a singular verb (IIRC), try printing this out and reading it out loud slowly to see if there are other placves that need to be polished a bit.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 11:59, 21 January 2009 (UTC)