Wikipedia:Peer review/List of India Twenty20 International cricketers/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because this list, a failed FLC wasn't updated in the last 4 years. I have expanded this list with statistics upto date. I want everyone's feedback on how to make this an FL.
Thanks, —Commander (Ping me) 12:32, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
Comments –
We have a helpful example of a similar FL at List of England Twenty20 International cricketers. One thing I notice right off the bat is that the first paragraph is more well-developed in the England list. Modelling the first paragraph here after the one there would be wise.
- I have rearranged the sentences now. Does it look okay? —Commander (Ping me) 12:29, 3 January 2012 (UTC)
- Yes, that looks much better. Giants2008 (Talk) 02:21, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
"having played 31 T20I matches for 16 wins and a tie against Pakistan." "for" → "with"?
"In 2007, they became won the world championship...". Remove "became".
Is the fourth-highest total in an innings sourced by anything?
In the photo caption, the "till date" doesn't help the writing and would be better off removed.
Could cite captains and wicketkeepers in the key, like the England list does.
Players: "This list comprising of list of Indian cricketers...". Needs "comprising of list" taken out.
In the footnote, "international" should probably be capitalized.
The hyphen in the title of reference 2 should probably be an en dash. Such minor formatting improvements are permitted for ref titles.
What makes http://www.itsonlycricket.com/entry/1888/ a reliable source?Giants2008
(Talk) 22:40, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
- Replaced that with a RS. —Commander (Ping me) 14:29, 3 January 2012 (UTC)
- Comments
As Giants2008 suggested, improve the lead.Rephrase "they became won".
Table does not meet WP:ACCESS requirements; use scope row, column and header, etc (if I'm not missing anything else).
Categorize the column headings into batting, bowling and fielding.
You didn't use ♠ anywhere.
Fix this large white space in the "Players" section, above the table. I guess you need to adjust the width of the table, or don't use it at all.
- Did you mean removing the image? —Commander (Ping me) 10:14, 3 January 2012 (UTC)
- No, I was taking about
width
parameter. Actually you should use more good quality images. — Bill william comptonTalk 03:49, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
- No, I was taking about
West Indies → West Indies in the footnotes.
Instead of using slashes use dashes in the titles of the references.
— Bill william comptonTalk 03:10, 3 January 2012 (UTC)
- Comments
- The Australian team is overlinked in the lead.
- Tie v Pakistan isn't in ref 4.
- You expand MS of MS Dhoni, but not RP of RP Singh.
- Check sorting. E.g. HS, you have a 0 sorting before a bunch of en-dashes...
- Suggest you force the en-dashes to sort before 0's in all columns.
Didn't get you. Can you make a dummy edit to illustrate tha if possible.—Commander (Ping me) 09:47, 4 January 2012 (UTC)
- "first Twenty20 cap." not sure why "first Twenty20" is part of the link to the cap.
- Virendar Sehwag ->Virender Sehwag.
- Cricinfo linked in ref 1 and ref 4 only. Why not the lot or just the first?