Wikipedia:Peer review/List of FC Barcelona managers/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review to get a few comments on it. Sandman888 (talk) 07:21, 5 September 2010 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: FC Barcelona is becoming quite a WP industry. Here are some comments on the latest list:-
- "...dismissed four months later without winning a single title". This wording seems harsh on Barrow. How many titles was he expected to win in four months?
- Indeed. Removed single.
- "longest-serving consecutive manager". Doesn't make sense - what is the intended meaning?
- unimportant. removed.
- Third paragraph: probably better to begin: "As of 2010 the manager is..." The paragraph will have to be updated anyway if/when Guardiola leaves.
- done
- The lead is short. I suggest that, rather than relying on a link to another article, you extend the lead by explaining what the "sextuple" consisted of.
- done
- Is "La Liga" the same as the "Spanish League"?
- clarified
- What does "TBA" mean in the first line of the table? Normally in English TBA means "to be announced" but this can't be right here.
- TBD now
- In the second line of the table the link on John Barrow goes to a disambiguation page.
- fixed
- Is it possible to give the period of Barrow's service more precisely? From 1917 to 1917 doesn't make much sense. The same is true to some extent for Poszony (whose dates are given as 1924-25 here)
- If I only could...
- The information in the Notes column does not correspond to what is under the "Notes" heading after the table. For example there are 24 "A"s in the column, but only 19 letters (a - s) in the Notes heading.
- Thanks for reviewing this. The industry is soon completed, no worries! Sandman888 (talk) 15:37, 15 September 2010 (UTC)
I hope these comments are helpful. Brianboulton (talk) 18:06, 11 September 2010 (UTC)