Wikipedia:Peer review/List of 1948 Winter Olympics medal winners/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like some constructive criticism on how I could better its chances of passing FLC. I'd welcome anything you have to throw at me!
Thanks, Arctic Night 18:44, 30 October 2010 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: This looks pretty good to me, thanks for your work on it; here are some suggestions for improvement with an eye to FLC.
- The disambiguation links tool in the toolbox in the upper right corner here finds three dab links that will need to be fixed before FLC.
- Odd sentence Both men and women were permitted to participate in the 1948 Games, with women making an appearance in alpine skiing and figure skating.[3] permitted to participate?? How about something like While men and women participated in the 1948 Games, women's events were limited to alpine skiing and figure skating.[3]
- Tighten The United States placed fourth in the medal count, with nine
medals, and Austria placed fifth, with eight. - Per WP:ORDINAL Numbers that begin a sentence are spelled out, since using figures risks the period being read as a decimal point or abbreviation mark; it is often better to recast the sentence than to simply change format, which may produce other problems... so fix 13 out of the 28 competing National Olympic Committees won at least one medal, with 10 of these winning at least one gold.
- Tighten Sweden repeated its success in cross-country skiing, winning all three medals in the Men's 18 km event and all three gold medals for the Men's 18[,]
km event, Men's50[,]kmandMen's4x10 km events.[6] - Alpine skiing section has a subhead that reads "Men's events" but it lists both men's and women's events in the table
- Speed skating's see also is wrong (currently reads See also: Speed skating at the 1936 Winter Olympics (copy and paste error?)
- Are all the sources used reliable sources? What makes www.sports-reference.com/ a RS, for example?
- While ref 7 does confirm that Henri Oreiller won three medals at these Olympics, it does not say that this was the most of any athlete (which is the more extraordinary claim and needs a ref).
- There is no Wikimedia Commons page for these Olympics, so does not need that link
- Not much else to comment on - images look OK in terms of licenses,
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:51, 9 November 2010 (UTC)