Wikipedia:Peer review/Lego Indiana Jones: The Original Adventures/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I intend to nominate it for FAC. My first FA, Smash Hit, was recently promoted so I'm positive that this article could be improved too. The article was promoted to GA in early October and since then I've worked a bit, mainly improving the references. I'll thus only need recommendations on improving the prose before nominating it for FAC. Thanks, Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 15:28, 4 November 2024 (UTC)
Comments from BP
[edit]I just thought that I need review from my FAC, so I should weigh in here to review this one =).
- "The game consists of three chapters, each with six stages,[6][7] which are accessible from the game's hub, Barnett College, which serves as Indiana Jones's recurring teaching location in the film series." The sentence os getting long, can you paraphrase it?
- I've split the sentences up. -V
- I had to google what is "stylus", maybe you can explain in a way that non-familiar readers will know?
- Done. -V
- "Ricks said that the developers debated whether to include the German Iron Cross but eventually just kept the Reichsadler (eagle)." Unsource?
- That sentence and the following two are backed up by Ref 36 (Robinson, 2008), as seen in the article. -V
- Who is "Storc"?
- A LucasArts producer. This was for some reason removed at one point (likely by me), but I don't remember when and why. I probably tried rewriting those paragraphs and forgot to add it back. -V
- What makes X-Play reliable? 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:47, 16 November 2024 (UTC)
- It's listed as a defunct reliable source at WP:VG/RS. It was definitely a highly reliable video game source. -V