Wikipedia:Peer review/Kunichika/archive1

Kunichika

I've listed this article for peer review because I believe I have taken it far beyond stub status and would like to see it move up in rank. People are no longer responding on "request for feedback," which makes me think this page is ready for its next step.

Thanks,

--23:54, 24 September 2007 (UTC)Clhowson

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 23:50, 26 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I've made most of the corrections requested by the "automat" and a great many more corrections and additions besides. I'd really like an updated review.

--Clhowson 22:17, 4 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Education and Art on the cusp of a new era sections are very short if you can't expand them consider merging into other sections
some of his finest works were and Kunichika had many students, but few approached greatness as print artists looks a bit POV (namely - it sounds like judgment), perhaps reword this
Placement of images could be more even (currently most of images are placed into one section and pile up there while rest of the article seems a bit empty)
It would be better if there were no red links in see also section (there's nothing to see if article doesn't exist) unless you plan to write them in near future ----Xil...sist! 23:52, 14 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Xil, for your suggestions. I have merged sections, moved images and fixed red links (left over from the original article, I think). Re the Wiki POV, these are not judgments, but historical facts. I do not know how else to state it. There were a lot of Rembrandt students who never achieved their master's greatness. Fact. --Clhowson 14:05, 15 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I pointed these out because I think they can be fixed:

his finest works - to state that something is better than everything else is a judgement, however you state it as a fact - don't and maybe state whose view it is
never achieved their master's greatness - you also have written that Neither ever achieved his master's high reputation which is a fact, if you merged these sentences you would have the same meaning in not POV-looking way, wouldn't you ?

Anyway - you have done great job expanding the article and these are just suggestions----Xil...sist! 17:13, 15 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]