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Konnan

Several editors recommended that this page undergo a peer review before being considered as a featured article. Other than footnotes and links within the body text, there are likely other issues with this page that have escaped the attentions of the authors. McPhail 14:48, 22 January 2006 (UTC)

• It is a good solid article. Suggestions for improvements include:
  • Shorten the intro sentence to something easier to read. For example, try splitting it into two sentences. The part mentioning where and when he was born is background info not necessary for the definition.
  • Do not rely on the gerweck.net as a reference, especially when more trustworthy sources say the same thing, like the slam.canoe.ca.
  • Let's just remove the word "every" (and "has" while you're at it) from the sentence "he has also wrestled for every major American promotion, including the..."
  • give a dollar figure for the "200 pesos" for us not familiar with how much that is. I'm not sure how to properly cite pesos - is it $200 MXN - for Canadian dollars it is CAD$200.
  • Work on the transitions in "Career", specifically for "AAA" to "WWF" (how/why did he switch?). Treat "Career" as a narrative of his career.
  • Consider creating a new section entitled "Early life" for his street gang/navy experiences. If possible, please reference his navy experience to an offical us.gov source as I am not entirely convinced of this piece of info.
  • Convert "Finishing and signature moves" and "Managers" to tables and integrate into the text, like Saffron#Chemistry. Also, add years of service to the Managers table
  • I'm not a big fan of lists of quotes. Consider removing them, especially if it is suggested at FAC.
  • Add years for "Championships and accomplishments"
  • What is the difference between "Championships and accomplishments" and "Championship succession"
  • Merge "Trivia" into the article. Trivia violates the FAC requirement for brilliant prose. --maclean25 21:13, 28 January 2006 (UTC)