Wikipedia:Peer review/Kirkcaldy/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because there are still some problems like page numbers for citations and sentence structuring that are preventing it from moving forward and especially for the sake of the former considering the vast information i have acquired from three main sources - how i can going to get round this, i don't know. The article itself has a good strong introduction and history section plus a wealth of sources and pictures. Overall, a general inspection and tidy up is desperately required here plus some good advice on how to deal with those sources citing page numbers.
Thanks, Kilnburn (talk) 23:45, 5 August 2008 (UTC)
Comments by Dtbohrer
Here is what I found initially. If you would like more or if there is something you want me look at specifically, just ask and I'll more than happy to oblige.
Intro
- You may want to add a translation for its nickname "the lang toun". It might not be obvious to most people of what it means.
- "Dysart later joined the fold in 1930" - Forgive me, but what's a fold?
History
- You mention the battle in 596 AD, and then describe the origins of the name, and then jump back into more history. You may want to move the battle to directly in front of "However, the roots of the town can be traced" to keep from jumping around.
- "The meaning of the name "Kirkcaldy" is unknown but many claim in relation to previous spellings of the town as "Kirkaladunt" and "Kirkaladin" indicating pictish influence," - Hard to follow, I suggest "The origin of the name "Kirkcaldy" is unknown but possible origins suggest that the relation to previous spellings of the town, as "Kirkaladunt" and "Kirkaladin," indicate a Pictish influence."
- "as well as the names of the once nearby settlements of "Dunnikier" and "Raith" it may be relating to a "fort"." - What does this mean?
- "purchase for "the shire of Kirkaladunt" from the crowns" - Who are "the crowns"?
- "acknowledged as a "villa", according to records," - What "records"?
- ...the abbot and covenant of Dunfermline was in a discussion with King Edward I, - It should be plural ("were" not "was").
- The quote by Thomas Carlyle should not be in block quotes as only quotes longer than 4 lines should be block quoted. I count only 2 lines on my screen.
Governance
- "Labour continues to gain strong support in the town," - I'm assuming you're refering to the Labour Party.
- "supplying Gordon Brown MP (for Kirkcaldy and Cowdenbeath) and Marilyn Livingstone MSP (Kirkcaldy)" - What do "MP" and "MSP" stand for?
Geography
- "Kirkcaldy is located on a southeastern bay leading out into the sea along a sandy cove" - Do the "bay" and the "sea" have names?
- "The landscape may detect parts of a medieval layout in the form of raised beaches above sea-level around the town" - What's a "medieval layout"?
Religion probably could be merged with "Demography"
To take care of the page numbers in the citations, you may want look at using shortened citations. I'm willing help with this, if you need it.
Overall, it shouldn't be to much trouble to get it to GA. The information is there, it just needs to be cleaned up. --D.B.talk•contribs 00:10, 12 August 2008 (UTC)