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Kim Kitsuragi

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Looking for input from someone who is good at organizing/summarizing an overwhelming number of sources. I'm hoping to take this article to GA, maybe even further. The article could mainly use a second opinion on what's missing, and anything that seems unclear to an outside reader. There are a lot of sources that talk about this character. Maybe too many. I don't want to fully omit sources in the interest of brevity, but I know there is a better way to summarize and organize the reception. I'd appreciate an outside opinion. Shooterwalker (talk) 17:25, 17 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720

Comments after a quick skim:

Lede needs to be expanded.
Appearances needs to be expanded, per the orange banner.
Reception is way too long. Consider reading WP:RECEPTION and organise the section by categories.
Has this person influenced culture or society?

Let me know if you have any questions. Z1720 (talk) 16:57, 20 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Z1720: I can definitely expand the lead and the appearances section. I agree with you about the reception, and could use some more feedback. Can you suggest some ways to cover the same material in a more organized, succinct way? Shooterwalker (talk) 20:04, 21 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Shooterwalker: WP:RECEPTION has suggestions on how to do this. Z1720 (talk) 20:15, 21 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I made some few changes and removed Cultured Vultures as unreliable. I think the interview and commentary about its portrayal could be potentially be removed. 🍕Boneless Pizza!🍕 (🔔) 05:56, 22 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the feedback. I'll try to work with it. If anyone has more specific ideas for the reception, I'll leave this Peer Review open for another week or two. Shooterwalker (talk) 00:27, 24 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]