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Killing of Patrick Lyoya

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This peer review discussion is closed.

The article has been listed for peer review as there has not been much interaction by other users and due to the controversial nature of the article's topic. Assistance is also needed with any issues regarding neutrality and WP:BLP, as edits should not be made in a damaging manner.

Thanks, WMrapids (talk) 20:52, 17 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from FormalDude

Lede section is too short for an article of this length.
The Incident section borders on having an excessive amount of intricate detail. Not sure all the dialogue is needed. Should be trimmed to fit summary style.
Response section possibly contains undue weight (police subsection for example) and could potentially be reorganized (Grand Rapids Association of Pastors is part of the public response, no?).

––FormalDude (talk) 09:14, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@WMrapids: to ensure that they saw the above comments. If you are not interested in receiving more comments, can you close this PR? Thanks, Z1720 (talk) 19:02, 2 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Since WMrapids has not responded to the above, and it has been open for several month, I have decided to close this PR. A new PR can be opened when the above are addressed. Z1720 (talk) 16:32, 20 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]