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Jogaila

I expanded and sourced the article recently and I believe it is on its' way towards FA now. However, I'm not a native speaker and the article should definitely be reviewed by someone who is. Besides bad prose, there's probably some weasel terms here and there, some statements that could do with a reference and so on. Thanks in advance for any comments. //Halibutt 21:35, 9 November 2006 (UTC)

I am under the impression that you still need to work on the 'Last years' sections, even if no notable events took place during that time, those paras need inline citations. 'Titles' and 'Family relations' need refs too. Setting aside the controversial naming issue, great job improving the content of the article while so many of us (myself included) were mostly active on talk only.-- _{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus | talk}  22:05, 9 November 2006 (UTC)

• Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 14:43, 10 November 2006 (UTC)

I would echo your concerns about the prose, Halibu. It's not bad, but a through copy-editting for style, grammar, usage, etc. will help it get to "compelling". -Fsotrain⁰⁹ 21:48, 15 November 2006 (UTC)

You're a native speaker, I'm not. Could you give it a try? //Halibutt 23:14, 16 November 2006 (UTC)