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Jennifer Hudson discography

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I've listed this article for peer review becaus I feel that the article is well-referenced. Although it isn't at all ready for FLC, I would like some creative imput as to how I can improve the article to this high standard. Thanks, Dt128 (talk) 17:17, 24 May 2009 (UTC)

• Okay. Mostly looks good per MOS:DISCOG. US Dance Club Play column should read "US Dance" and the Canadian cite should be moved up into the column to be with the rest. "If This Isn't Love" needs a ref for its director, and the footnote for her new single should just read "To be released", preferably with a cite verifying it. Ten Pound Hammer, his otters and a clue-bat • ^{(Many otters • One bat • One hammer)} 02:35, 27 May 2009 (UTC)
  • As for the reference for Diane Martel, I cannot find one from a reliable, suitable source. Dt128 (talk) 14:26, 27 May 2009 (UTC)
    • Hmm. That's strange. Ten Pound Hammer, his otters and a clue-bat • ^{(Many otters • One bat • One hammer)} 17:05, 27 May 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: The number of albums and singles is really short and I think as such it does not meet the requirements for WP:FL - you may want to ask on the FL talk page. Anyway, here are some suggestions for improvement.

• The first paragraph is one sentence - I think it should be expanded to several sentences, or better, combined with the second paragraph.
• The lead says three singles and the infobox says five singles - which is correct?
• The lead says one album, but the article lists two albums. Again, which is it?
• This needs a copyedit - the proper spelling is "incorporates" and the last phrase in Hudson rose to fame as a contestant on the third series of American Idol, however being eliminated at the "Top 7" stage.[1] is just not grammatically correct.
• This becoming one of the few people to win an award at the ceremony for a debut performance. needs a ref (extraordinary claim)
• The top is number one, not number two The album shot to the top of the Billboard charts, debuting at number two on the Billboard 200 chart.
• Refs need to meet WP:RS - Amazon is not usually seen as a reliable source
• Refs alos need to be consistent - is it "amazon" or "amazon" as one example?

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 04:26, 6 June 2009 (UTC)