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Jammu and Kashmir (state)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to nominate the article for good article status. I think I should ask the fellow editors for the suggestions and improvements in the article before nominating.

Thanks, –Kammill ⟨talk⟩ 14:59, 8 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm, reading the article so far, what I suggest first is working on the lead. The first sentence of the lead is a run-on; I suggest you can shorten the first sentence that explains succinctly what was the region, or state. The lead should also cover what is being covered in the body; there isn't much mention of the demographics or history in the lead (could be further elaborated).

History

"India's belated discovery of this road culminated in the Sino-Indian War of 1962; China has since administered Aksai Chin". How is the discovery "belated"? Also, you can elaborate a bit more on the Sino-Indian War here, that is relevant to the subject in question. This is rather brief.
"Following the 2008 Kashmir unrest, secessionist movements in the region were boosted.". Also suggest elaborating what the unrest was about, and change the latter clause to be more encyclopedia (e.g. there has been a rise of secessionist sentiments, or rise in support of secession.)
On its dissolution, I also suggest an update on its aftermath; it feels rather incomplete. Are Internet services still blocked? Are those arrested formally charged? Also suggest linking to its successor region(s). What were also the people's reactions?

Demographics

For formatting, I suggest swapping around the pie chart and the historical population's diagram.

Government

I also encourage images to illustrate the former government apparatus of the state.
"In 2005, it was reported that the Indian National Congress-led government in the state intended to amend the term to bring parity with the other states." Any further updates on this?--ZKang123 (talk) 02:49, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Economy

"The British government had reiterated its advise against all travel to Jammu and Kashmir in 2013, with certain exceptions.". Further elaborate on the exceptions

Further comments

What I will encourage is to update any relevant facts regarding the state, and provide further elaboration if necessary. The article is not bad; it could still be improved further with more images.
I also encourage creating a geography section, even a brief one, since it doesn't feel complete without one.

Article seems stable. Images used this far are properly licensed. Add more images if necessary to better illustrate the article.--ZKang123 (talk) 02:49, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

ZKang123, should I start working? –Hulged ⟨talk⟩ 10:03, 26 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, anyone else can work on it. I have other matters to do however, and I just came across this while looking through other articles.--ZKang123 (talk) 10:06, 26 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]