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Jainism and non-creationism

Request for peer review--Anish Shah 12:12, 16 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Article markedly lacks inline citations. All quotes in particular should be directly cited. Generally, at least one such citation per paragraph are sought, and the "Jaina Conception of Divinity" section and its first three subsections each completely lack for such citations. Some sort of image, and I grant the difficulty of finding such an image in this case, would be desirable as well. Article lacks several internal links to other articles, including such important links as to the Dharma article. The presence of such links in the sidebar does not remove the desirability for similar links in the text as well. Also, the presence of extensive quotes is generally seen to detract from the encyclopedic quality of an article, such as the extensive quote in the "Jaina criticism of the creationist viewpoint" heading. Such quotes are one of the reasons Wikiquote exists. On the same topic, that heading could be reasonably shortened to something like "Jaina opposition to creationism", which would be rather a bit more clearly NPOV. There are also some other POV possibilities in the article. the last sentence of the last paragraph of "The Theory of Material Cause and Effect" is another such instance. Some phrasing, such as "many Jains are know to worship to such gods", is at best awkward and deters to a degree from clarity. The claim that it should be rated "at least GA" is clearly not born out by the possibility of so many weaknesses. Also, I make a point of not rating any article that has not already been nominated for GA as such, leaving that more formal process to others. And please note that it is one of the rules of the GA process, as per Wikipedia:Good article candidates#How to review an article, that individuals who have contributed to the creation of an article are not supposed to determine whether an article meets GA criteria or not. If you believe that the article does meet GA criteria, of course, please feel free to nominate it. John Carter 13:49, 6 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments. I would rather not nominate it as I have been a significant contributor to this article and would appreciate improvements on it.

I am not able to understand your comment -"Article markedly lacks inline citations. All quotes in particular should be directly cited.". Can you please provide some example. As to your other concerns, I will copy it on talk pages and try to resolve it.--Anish Shah 04:36, 7 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]