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Indiana Jones and the Last Crusade

• A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for May 2009.

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I've listed this article for peer review because it meets all the criteria wanted. At first the article was not written very well. So, I look through the article and made some clean up on it. The beginning paragraphy for the article wasn't so goo, so I changed it.[1] In the marketing paragraph, there were two links to article that didn't exist. So, I cleaned them up.[2]

Thanks, WCW - (Want to Talk) 07:11, 15 May 2009 (UTC)

Well I reverted these edits: the lead doesn't need any further description of the plot and your second point does not meet WP:REDLINK. Alientraveller (talk) 22:02, 15 May 2009 (UTC)

About the WP:REDLINK, I was wrong and I'm sorry. But, the lead should have description about the plot. Like the article who wrote yourself, Casino Royale. World Cinema Writer (talk•contributions) 07:19, 16 May 2009 (UTC)

Again, stop being excessive. And I've had little involvement in Casino Royale. Stop defending your edits by saying such and such does this and that. Alientraveller (talk) 12:07, 16 May 2009 (UTC)

The article's first paragraph needs a lot of attention and expansion. I'm just helping you to bring the article to the FA. I want to be friends. I do want us to be nemesis. World Cinema Writer (talk • contributions) 12:22, 16 May 2009 (UTC)

Review comments

I've fixed some of the grammatical issues in the plot summary.

The weakest section of this article seems to be the section on cultural references and this deserves better treatment.

• First, yes, an important cultural reference is the father-son relationship; much more has been written about this, and could be included in this summary, especially in light of the fourth installment, which is also about fathers and sons, but from the different perspective. A subtheme of this is the reference to not only fathers and sons, but the shift between generations: in the beginning of the film, for example, Henry Jones Sr. is obsessed with the Grail. His obsession nearly gets himself, and his son killed. His son nearly buys into the obsession; his father lets the obsession go, and tells "junior" to do the same.

• The second important cultural reference is the importance of personal choices: this reference begins with the opening scene, and continues through to the end, and really has two subthemes: what choices to people make, and what motivates those choices. It is emphasized at the end, where Elsa chooses for Donovan, Donovan drinks, dies, and the Knight says, "he chose poorly." Throughout the concluding minutes of the film, each critical point is highlighted by a difficult choice: Elsa's choice to take the Grail beyond the seal, and then her refusal to let it go; Indy's attempt to recover it; his father's choice to let it go; etc.

Someone else needs to comment on the special effects and technical achievements.

--Auntieruth55 (talk) 18:34, 21 May 2009 (UTC)