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The article has developed over five months and has now reached a stage where it seems quite stable. I've pretty much exhausted sources that are easily available to me so I'm not likely to be adding a lot of extra content unless friends give me significant new material. I feel the history section is a bit thin: sadly that reflects difficulty in finding high quality historical source material about this aspect of circus arts. The main reason for seeking peer review is that I've done the great majority of the work on this piece and I feel I need for independent opinions to ensure I take a balanced approach to any further development. Also, it has no classification at the moment and I would ideally like to have it properly classified.Circusandmagicfan 17:56, 23 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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Have added links where it seems appropriate. Will re-check but am wary of over linking.
  • If there is not a free use image in the top right corner of the article, please try to find and include one.[?]
Images have been a big problem. Those that I have available seem to have failed Wiki's license criteria. I'm seeking new images from people who work in the field.
Hopefully now addressed thanks to a performer who supplied me with one of his publicity images and agreed that it be released on free licence.Circusandmagicfan (talk) 10:47, 23 May 2008 (UTC)Circusandmagicfan[reply]
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Last few sections conform to guidelines (ie. "See also", "Notes and references", "Further reading", "External links").
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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 14:36, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Responses noted.Circusandmagicfan 18:27, 31 July 2007 (UTC)Circusandmagicfan[reply]
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